Suddenly...BOOM! My sister had hurtled herself down
the stairs.
"Yasmine yasmine,"she laughed."We are going to the mountains.""Bla Bla,"I
scowled.
Vroom vroom.Flossy's car drove in our drive way.Flossy was my mums (Amelia)
friend.
"Eleanorrrrrr!"screamed Sophie."Eleanor's here,Eleanor's here!"she yelled.A chorus
of noise rang out of Sophie: " Eleanor yay cool she's
awesome."
After mum had made the sandwiches we hopped in the cars and drove away
( of course Sophie hopped in the same car as Eleanor.)
1 hour later the road was closed because of a snow fall.Were we staying or leaving?Well we stayed.Flossy gave us a hot chocolate.
CHAPTER 2
Snow fell from the crooked witch hat trees. It piled up like a mountain so high- that it
could reach the sky. A barbed wire fence prickled with icy flakes.
A big pond lay flat in the middle with a crackled crack.Wrapped up warm in my coat
I could still fell the cold.
CHAPTER 3
We walked to a little hut." Let's build a snowman," I said. The snowmans snow
balls grew bigger and bigger.Finally we finished.I got the sticks, the carrot and a few raisins.
Soon we had to leave.We drove home in the white and green cars.
THE END
I have been working on making my writing more descriptive.
I want to improve my writing by: making it look like a real story.
